Silvana M Albano
Snack by the Sea, oil on board, 20 x 25 cm (8 x 10")
Great to see you playing with the scene, Silvana. The beach and sky itself are quite believable; however, you’ve placed the horizon too high, which is throwing everything out of kilter. I’ve altered it in Photoshop so you can see the difference.
Another few things I altered were to remove the seagulls, which were too large for their positions on the beach and also to change the shape of the shadows in the right-hand track because they were making a 1, 2, 3, 4 pattern of equal size and spacing. The horizon is now flat, which is always important in painting the ocean like this. While I was fiddling with your painting, I also darkened the tree and extended it to the left so it wasn’t in line with the edge of the building anymore. The final touch was glazing a soft shadow across the foreground to see how that looked.
So there are a few ideas for you. There’s plenty of good work in your painting—the colour is good, if a little muddy in places where you’ve let the cools mix with the warms in the halftones (between light and shadow). Your brushwork is varied and interesting, creating that rough tussock texture nicely. Your drawing, apart from the horizon level, is very good. Keep up the good work!